启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌,每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文中,每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正,是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。
一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly displays the numerial changes of urban residents and rural population over the period from year 1990 to 2010. The size of urban residents rises up sharply by 300 million in 1990 to 666 million in 2010, while rural population drop slightly from about 834 million to 674 million in the same period.
On the one hand, the rapid urbanization of china increased job opportunities, improved infrastructure. The impressive development grive more and more citizens better quality of life. On the other hand, too many people flowing into city will lead to traffic jam and high house prices.
what about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban residents will steadilly increase in the following decades, and I believe all these effects that arise with development will be solved eventually.
It is important to recognize that China"s growth in the past few decades is impressive, an achievment that inspires.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:he numerial c
批改:numerial → numerical (拼写错误)
原文: rises up sharply by 300 million in 1990
批改:rises up sharply by 300 million in 1990 to 666 million → rose sharply from 300 million in 1990 to 666 million (时态错误,表达不准确)
原文: drop sligh
批改:drop slightly → dropped (时态错误,且1.6亿的下降不算"slightly")
原文:he bar chart clearly displays the numerial changes of urban residents and rural population over the period from year 1990 to 2010. The size of urban residents rises up sharply by 300 million in 1990 to 666 million in 2010, while rural population drop slightly from about 834 million to 674 million in the same period.
批改:本段基本完成了图表描述任务,准确捕捉了城乡人口变化趋势。主要问题在于时态混乱和部分用词不够精准
原文: china
批改:china → China (专有名词未大写)
原文:ncreased job oppor
批改:increased job opportunities, improved infrastructure 句子不完整
原文:grive more and more citizens better quality of life. On the other hand, too many people flowing into city will lead to traffic jam and high house prices.
批改:grive → gives (拼写错误) city → cities (单复数错误)
原文:n the one hand, the rapid urbanization of china increased job opportunities, improved infrastructure. The impressive development grive more and more citizens better quality of life. On the other hand, too many people flowing into city will lead to traffic jam and high house prices
批改:本段尝试从正反两方面分析城市化影响,角度不错。但存在严重的语法错误
原文:hat ab
批改:what → What (首字母未大写)
原文: steadill
批改:steadilly → steadily (拼写错误
原文:uture trends? I am confident that the number of urban residents will steadilly increase in the following decades, and I believe all these effects that arise with development will be solved eventually. It is important to recognize that China"s growth in the past few decades is impressive, an achievment that inspires.
批改:本段对未来趋势做出了合理预测,体现了辩证思考
原文:hievment
批改:achievment → achievement (拼写错误)句子不完整,突然结束
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10分
总评:
同学,你好!你的作文准确描述了图表的核心信息,并展现了分析问题的辩证思维,这是很好的基础。为了进一步提升作文质量,请注意以下几点:
主要优点:
准确捕捉了城乡人口变化趋势
能够从正反两方面分析问题
文章结构基本清晰
待改进方面:
语言准确性:需要注意拼写、时态和句子完整性
论述深度:分析可以更加具体深入
结构优化:建议采用标准的三段式结构
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