2019年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2019年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the various choices of graduates in a certain university in 2013 and 2018. In 2013, the percentage of graduates who chose to seek jobs was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially risen to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of those who chose to continue studying experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of those who chose to build themselves corporations remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, graduates are no longer content with material satisfaction; they also pursue self-realization. This explains why an increasing number of graduates choose to continue studying rather than seek jobs. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling graduates to have ample opportunities for continuing studying. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of graduates who choose to continue studying will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of those who choose to seek jobs will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the various choices of graduates in a certain university in 2013 and 2018.

批改：开篇点明图表类型（柱状图）以及图表所呈现的核心内容，即某大学2013年和2018年毕业生的不同选择，表述清晰准确。

原文： In 2013, the percentage of graduates who chose to seek jobs was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially risen to 60.7%.

批改：这里存在数据错误，根据逻辑，从2013到2018，求职比例应该是下降，而不是上升。

原文：In contrast, the proportion of those who chose to continue studying experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period.

批改：对比前一句，清晰阐述了选择继续深造的学生比例在同期有显著增长，逻辑连贯。

原文：Simultaneously, the percentage of those who chose to build themselves corporations remained stable and steady.

批改：“build themselves corporations”表述有误，应是“start their own corporations”

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.

批改：承上启下，自然引出下文对现象原因的分析，过渡合理。

原文：To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, graduates are no longer content with material satisfaction; they also pursue self-realization.

批改：从社会发展的角度分析毕业生选择继续深造的原因，逻辑合理，表达清晰。

原文：This explains why an increasing number of graduates choose to continue studying rather than seek jobs.

批改：进一步解释前一句提到的毕业生追求自我实现与选择继续深造之间的因果关系，逻辑紧密。

原文：In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling graduates to have ample opportunities for continuing studying.

批改：从政府层面分析原因，使用了比喻的修辞手法，使表达更生动

原文：Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：总结前文原因，得出图表现象不足为奇的结论，逻辑连贯。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of graduates who choose to continue studying will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：自然引出对未来趋势的预测，观点明确。

原文：In contrast, the proportion of those who choose to seek jobs will likely continue to decrease.

批改：与前一句形成对比，进一步阐述未来求职比例的变化趋势，逻辑清晰。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

题目要求：文章基本遵循了题目要求，完成了对图表的解读以及给出相应评论这两个核心任务。开篇点明图表所呈现的是某大学2013年和2018年毕业生的不同选择，之后围绕这一内容展开对现象原因的分析，最后对未来趋势进行了预测，整体结构完整，符合题目设定的大致框架。

语言表达：使用了“In contrast”“To start with”“In addition”“Simultaneously”等连接词，使文章的层次较为清晰，逻辑连贯性得到了一定程度的体现.

内容层面：在分析现象原因时，明确指出社会发展使毕业生追求自我实现以及政府构建良好教育体系提供深造机会，是导致选择继续深造比例上升的原因；对未来趋势的预测也清晰表明继续深造比例会上升，求职比例会下降，观点易于理解。

修改建议：仔细检查文章中的语法结构，确保主谓一致、时态正确等，提高语言的准确性。

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