2013年考研英语二大作文写作方向与示例

当你坐在考研英语二考场，面对2013年大作文题目的那一瞬间，是否能快速组织起一篇结构清晰、表达地道的高分文章？本文这篇批改例文，正是考研英语二作文范文话题下的标准范本，适合每一位考研英语备考生反复研读。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the situation of students" part-time jobs in a certain university. In fresh year, the percentage of part-time jobs was 67.77%, but by senior year, this rate had substantially risen to 88.24%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present. " Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense employment pressure, as a result, taking part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. In addition, an increasing number of university student believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, the experience of part-time jobs is indispensable if they wish to achieve sucess in the long run, so many senior students take part-time jobs in order to better adjust to finding a job.

What about future treads? I am confident that the proportion of students" part-time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：fresh year

批改：改为 the freshman year 是规范的表达

原文：part-time jobs

批改：是学生的比例，改为 students taking part-time jobs

原文： senior year

批改：改为 the senior year

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容 ，但是可以更详细一点，在大一，学生做兼职的比例是67.77%，但是到了大三，这个比例已经缓慢增加到 71.93%。相比之下，从大三到大四，学生做兼职的比例急剧增长了 16.31%。应该这样写，可参考范文的英文表达。

批改：语法正确

原文： as

批改：逗号不能连接两个完整的句子，改为 and as

原文：student

批改：此处为复数 students

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文： treads

批改：trends

原文： students" part-time jobs

批改：是学生的比例，改为 students taking part-time jobs

批改：结尾段表达不错

原文：better adjust to finding a job

批改：此处搭配不当，改为 prepare for their future jobs

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体，图表的描述需要更详细一点

修改建议：1. 语法和内容表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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