启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌,每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文中,每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正,是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。
一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in urban and rural population in china over past 20 years.In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 million,but by 2010, the figure had substantially risen to 674million.Meanwhile, the number of rural population experienced a slow decrease of 160 million
The core reasons for the observed phenomeon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomen is the significant progress made by the tremendous development f chinese cities in responding to these changes. In additioni,tin he wake of the high-speed advancement of city, ppeople"s attitudesof life have undergone significant changes,ppeople areno longer content with mere material satistaction, tthey alsopursue the high-level living environment.This explains wwhy anincreasing number of people choose to move to the ccities withsatisfied living conditions
What about future trends? II amconfident that tthe numberof urbon popuation will steadiy increase in the ffollowing decades In contrast,the nnumberofh rural opulation will ikely to rremain relatively stable.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:china
批改:大写
原文: past
批改:前面要加定冠词the
原文:674
批改:后加空格
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in urban and rural population in china over past 20 years.In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 million,but by 2010, the figure had substantially risen to 674million.Meanwhile, the number of rural population experienced a slow decrease of 160 million
批改:描述了图表内容,最后一句表达不太完整,应补充 from 1990 to 2010+句号
原文:phenomeon
批改:phenomenon
原文:phenomen
批改:phenomenon
原文:f
批改:of
原文:chinese
批改:大写
原文:the tremendous development f chinese cities
批改:表达混乱,这部分应改为Chinese cities
原文:additioni
批改:addition
原文:tin he
批改:in the
原文:ppeople"s
批改:people"s
原文:of
批改:介词要用towards
原文:p
批改:多余,应删除
原文:are
批改:后加空格
原文:satistaction
批改:satisfaction
原文:also
批改:后加空格
原文:, tthey
批改:句号+They
原文:wwhy
批改:why
原文:ccities
批改:cities
原文:with
批改:后加空格
原文:satisfied
批改:令人满意的要用satisfying
原文:city
批改:要用复数cities
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomeon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomen is the significant progress made by the tremendous development f chinese cities in responding to these changes. In additioni,tin he wake of the high-speed advancement of city, ppeople"s attitudesof life have undergone significant changes,ppeople areno longer content with mere material satistaction, tthey alsopursue the high-level living environment.This explains wwhy anincreasing number of people choose to move to the ccities withsatisfied living conditions
批改:从社会进步和国民需求角度展开分析,拼写错误较多,最后要加句号
原文:I
批改:应删除
原文:am
批改:后加空格
原文:t
批改:删除
原文:number
批改:后加空格
原文:urbon
批改:urban
原文:popuation
批改:population
原文:steadiy
批改:steadily
原文:f
批改:删除
原文:n
批改:删除
原文:number
批改:后加空格
原文:h
批改:删除
原文:opulation
批改:population
原文:ikely
批改:likely
原文:r
批改:删除
原文:What about future trends? II amconfident that tthe numberof urbon popuation will steadiy increase in the ffollowing decades In contrast,the nnumberofh rural opulation will ikely to rremain relatively stable.
批改:表达观点,注意拼写
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:5/15
题目要求:描述图表内容并针对图表中的现象展开分析,内容符合题意;
语言表达:全文拼写错误太多,而且为什么很多单词都是首字母重复?是不是键盘坏了?错别字太多非常影响阅读和文章的通顺性,可以注意下;
行文逻辑:第一段对柱状图的描述可以再准确一些,第二段给出详细论述,第三段表达观点,架构完整;
修改建议:改正原文错误;注意拼写的准确性;
同学还有进步的空间,希望下一篇更好~
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