启航教育在考研英语写作教学中反复强调:词汇与句式的高级化是考研英语作文高分的关键。本文整理的2011年考研英语二批改范例,几乎每一段都包含高分替换词与衔接词,是考研英语二作文真题写作锦囊中的代表性范文。
一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文
The chart above illustrates the market share of different car brands (domestic, Japanese, and American) in China’s sedan market between 2008 and 2009.
In 2008, Japanese brands took the lead with a market share of around 35%, while domestic brands accounted for approximately 25% and American brands made up about 12%. However, by 2009, notable changes had occurred. Domestic brands saw a significant rise, reaching roughly 32%, whereas Japanese brands experienced a decline to 25%. In contrast, American brands remained relatively stable at about 12%.
Several factors can account for these changes. Firstly, domestic car manufacturers have made remarkable progress in technology and product quality, making their vehicles more competitive in terms of cost - effectiveness. This has won them more consumers’ favor. Secondly, Japanese brands might have been affected by factors such as market competition intensity and shifts in consumer preferences. Meanwhile, American brands, with their consistent product positioning, maintained a steady market share.
In conclusion, the Chinese sedan market has witnessed a growing strength of domestic brands. It is foreseeable that if domestic brands continue to innovate and improve, they will gain an even larger market share in the future.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:The chart above illustrates the market share of different car brands (domestic, Japanese, and American) in China’s sedan market between 2008 and 2009. In 2008, Japanese brands took the lead with a market share of around 35%, while domestic brands accounted for approximately 25% and American brands made up about 12%. However, by 2009, notable changes had occurred. Domestic brands saw a significant rise, reaching roughly 32%, whereas Japanese brands experienced a decline to 25%. In contrast, American brands remained relatively stable at about 12%.
批改:对图表内容描述的很准确详细,语言连贯
原文:Several factors can account for these changes. Firstly, domestic car manufacturers have made remarkable progress in technology and product quality, making their vehicles more competitive in terms of cost - effectiveness. This has won them more consumers’ favor. Secondly, Japanese brands might have been affected by factors such as market competition intensity and shifts in consumer preferences. Meanwhile, American brands, with their consistent product positioning, maintained a steady market share.
批改:能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因,全面细致。
原文:In conclusion, the Chinese sedan market has witnessed a growing strength of domestic brands. It is foreseeable that if domestic brands continue to innovate and improve, they will gain an even larger market share in the future.
批改:能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:14/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,无拼写错误;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,总体来看语法基础没有问题。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。
对每一位2027考研人而言,考研英语二作文真题都是冲刺阶段必须攻克的难关。启航教育陪伴一届又一届学子走向考研英语写作高分,本文精解的2011年考研英语二范文正是经典参考之一。欢迎关注启航教育,了解更多考研英语备考干货。
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