2023年考研英语二大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

对于考研英语一而言，2023年大作文常以图画形式呈现。本文精解的这篇图画批改范例，启航教育老师逐句解读图画细节、寓意提炼与评论展开三步走，是考研英语作文万能句型图画作文的经典教学样本。

一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the health literacy of folks of our country from 2012 to 2021. In 2012, the percentage ofheality literacy was 8:80%. but by 2017. this rate had gradually rsen to 14.18%. In contrast, the proportion of health Literacy experienced a significant increase of 11.22% from 2017 to 2021.

The are reasons for the olsenved phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with as the conductor orcrestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous effort to build a sound health system. In addition, As we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly attering people"s be haviors and chaces. Consequently, an indreasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health Literacy (is a clear sign of social improvement and) will steadily increase in the following decades

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：of

批改：改为 in

原文：folks of our country

批改：我国居民可以说 Chinese residents

原文：heality

批改：改为 health

原文：8:80%

批改：数据不能出错 8.8%

批改：这里用逗号

批改：这里用逗号

原文：rsen

批改：正确写法为 risen

原文：Literacy

批改：首字母不用大写

原文：The line chart clearly depicts the health literacy of folks of our country from 2012 to 2021. In 2012, the percentage ofheality literacy was 8:80%. but by 2017. this rate had gradually rsen to 14.18%. In contrast, the proportion of health Literacy experienced a significant increase of 11.22% from 2017 to 2021.

批改：首段较准确描述了图表内容，在描述时将图中变化较为明显的数据描述出来，又将数据之间的变化关系通过前后对比呈现出来，需注意区分不同图表类型（条形图/折线图/饼状图）及如何描述，多积累表变化的动词如increase/rise/drop，以及表程度的副词如dramatically/significantly/steadily，还有描述最大最小值的短语如account for the largest proportion

原文：are

批改：正确写法为 core

原文：olsenved

批改：正确写法为 observed

原文：orcrestrating

批改：正确写法为 orchestrating

原文：health system

批改：这里建议用医疗体系或医疗服务体系 health care system/services

原文：As

批改：不在句首首字母不用大写

原文：attering

批改：正确写法为 altering

原文：be haviors

批改：正确写法为 behaviors

原文：chaces

批改：正确写法为 choices

原文：indreasing

批改：正确写法为 increasing

原文：The are reasons for the olsenved phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with as the conductor orcrestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous effort to build a sound health system. In addition, As we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly attering people"s be haviors and chaces. Consequently, an indreasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：主干从两方面分析了图中现象产生的原因，一是医疗卫生体系的健全，二是疫情促使人们更关注自身健康，还可以从"人们获取医疗和健康方面的信息和服务的渠道增多”和"人们生活水平改善，人均可支配收入增加，健康意识有所增加，对医疗卫生的投入和支出增加“的角度说明，结合时事热点举出具体的例子如远程会诊、家庭医生签约服务、全民健身等来说明

原文：Literacy

批改：首字母不用大写

原文：(

批改：删去

原文：)

批改：删去

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health Literacy (is a clear sign of social improvement and) will steadily increase in the following decades

批改：结尾进行了预测，未来居民健康素养水平将继续上升

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

1）内容上：较完整地描述了图表内容，论述要点也较清晰；

2）语言上：可以多运用丰富词汇和从句，采用转述或同义替换的方式表达；

3）结构上：运用了逻辑连词，论述角度可以更全面；

4）学习建议：

1.首段概括图表内容，注意区分不同图表类型（条形图/折线图/饼状图）及如何描述，多积累表变化的动词如increase/rise/drop，以及表程度的副词如dramatically/significantly/steadily，还有描述最大最小值的短语如account for the largest proportion；

2.主干可以分别从国家、社会和个人等各主体的角度出发，参考如下逻辑逐层展开：

“教育体系的完善得大众的平均受教育水平提高/科技发展使得人们获取医疗和健康方面的信息和服务的渠道增多/全民健身氛围浓厚，人们更关注自身健康（国家教育/科技/体育等方面）——人们生活水平改善，人均可支配收入增加，人均健康意识增加，对医疗卫生的投入增加（社会）——人们更愿意主动了解和掌握关于健康的知识，人们总体健康素养水平也相继提高（个人）”；

3.在论述时可以结合最新的像全运会、冰雪运动等热门话题，给出具体的例子支撑会更有说服力；

4.语言上可以有意识运用多样的表达，尝试转述或同义替换的方法，先保证准确传达句意，再灵活运用优质的短语和句型句式丰富表达；

5.另外想要更有条理地论述，可以有意识运用一些逻辑连词如 to start with/furthermore/to sum up/for one thing,...; for another,... 来划分主干层次，按“是什么——为什么——怎么做”谋篇布局会更清晰。

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