考研英语一2017年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2017年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

As a famous proverb goes, “Action speaks louder than intention." In the left-hand cartoon, there is a young man lying lazily on the sofa in a room filled with books. On the contrany, in the right-hand portrayal, there is another young man siting at table and reading. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is positive action that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lifes and in society.

This phenomenon is though-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, positive action has become a key quality that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. On the other hand, positive action holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone

for boosting overall national strength, further propelling social stability and sustainable development.

In brief, positive action is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：siting

批改：sitting

原文：Action speaks louder than intention

批改：最地道、最标准的谚语是 Actions speak louder than words.

批改：表达的主题和图画是贴合的，但是图画的描写要再具体一点，将图画中的文字也要表达出来

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在一处语法和拼写错误，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体，但是图画的表达要更具体一点，文字要表述出来

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 2. 首段的主题词要表达精确 3. 图画的表达要更具体一点，文字要表述出来。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。