2011年考研英语二大作文怎么写？附例文批改

面对2011年考研英语二大作文，许多同学最关心的是有没有可复制的写作模板。本文带来的高分范文严格遵循启航考研英语高分框架，从开头引入、主体论证到结尾呼应，全文清晰流畅，是考研英语考生的必备学习资料。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly dispicts the differents automobiles brands marketing share in our domestic market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brand was at 25%, but by 2009, the rate had substantially increased approximately 33%. In contrast, the figures of Japanese brand had experienced significantly decrease to 10% during the same period from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously, the American brand remained relatively steady and stable.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with, as the conductor orchestrating symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populance, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, Chinese society experienced extensive and compound transformation, and the fundamental reason for the phenomenon is the progress made by auto manufacturing industry in responding to these changes.

What about the future trends? I am confident the number of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In the contrast, the percentage of foreign brands will relatively decrease bit by bit.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the differents automobiles brands marketing share

批改：此处要表达的是不同汽车品牌市场份额的变化，注意名词的表达顺序，改为 the changes in market shares of different automobile brands

原文：brand

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 brands

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

原文：figures

批改：此处仍为 比例，改为 proportion

原文：significantly decrease to 10%

批改：此处动词后面为名词，改为 a significant decrease of 10%

原文： from 2008 to 2009

批改：删去，与前面 during the same period 是重复表达

原文： the American brand

批改：改为 the proportion of American brands

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容, 多注意语法问题

原文：reason

批改：下列有几个原因，此处为复数，改为 reasons

原文：populance

批改：populace

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

原文：extensive

批改：此处的 transformation 是可数名词，extensive 前面要加 an

原文：compound

批改：改为 profound

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

原文：number

批改：改为 proportion

批改：结尾段内容预测很合理

原文： bit by bit

批改：建议删去，表达太口语化了

原文：relatively

批改：改为 gradually 更合适

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 ，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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